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Summer Jobs

I wake up to an often-ugly world,
but I am frequently reminded
there is an opposite if I pay attention
to the many creatures and their summer toil

Egrets, with punk-rock crowns,
blazing white atop their heads
Seeking low tide meals along the inlet
Moving with grace, smooth like glass

And butterflies with delicate amber wings,
determined to alight on welcoming flowers
as they go about instinctive labors
in their world without intolerance

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Geezer

Geezer

2 years 11 months ago

Very good...

but I would have more! Maybe another analogy or two? ~ Geezer.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 11 months ago

I like it

I think it’s fine. (No offense Geez) I like the short format. It lets me fill in the blanks.

Tim

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 11 months ago

dear Michael Antony,

you remind me of Newton's theories. and I thank you for it. for every action, there is an equal and opposite reaction. my favorite lines are:

as they go about instinctive labors
in their world without intolerance

*hugs, Cat

Michael Anthony

Michael Anthony

2 years 11 months ago

Glad you liked this Cat! I

Glad you liked this Cat! I struggled a bit with the last word - hatred - judgment - and a few other like words were considered. Settled on intolerance since it seems to me to be an "umbrella" word, where much of the world's ills seem to eminate.

Best