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Summer's Pests [Trochee attempt][Meter WS]

Winter's gone and soon shall Spring.
Summer's close, on doors upcoming.
Wonder what its wings to bring but
awful pests and cheeks with stings.

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Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

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Rula

Rula

8 years 1 month ago

I know :)

Catalectic trochaic tetrameter. I hope it works though as an exercise. I might come up with a pentameter attempt, who knows?

judyanne

judyanne

8 years 1 month ago

Rula

You forgot to hit to hit the workshop button
xxx

judyanne

judyanne

8 years 1 month ago

lol

Forgot to say - good example, a little spot of humour too... I like it

Love judy
xxx
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Rula

Rula

8 years 1 month ago

Thank you

dear judy.
Appreciate the visit :)

Geezer

Geezer

8 years 1 month ago

Just so!...

Nothing to crit. Everything edible. ~ Gee.
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Rula

Rula

8 years 1 month ago

Dear Audri

Thanks for your kind words. I just hoped thatyou could manage more participation, but I understand how life goes dear. Try to have the joy of writing, sometimes it's just all that we need

Rula

Rula

8 years 1 month ago

You might be right

Jerry, but it still sounds fine to my ear when I read it aloud.
What about you :)

Rula

Rula

8 years 1 month ago

I believe

If you know the rules but occasionally break them (as long as the rhythm still flows well)I think it's ok then. At the moment I am so interested in training a musical ear. I think this is a step beyond just writing with strict meter, but of course you have a point and I completely respect it.
Many thanks for the kind visit.

Rula

Rula

8 years 1 month ago

Jerry, I am sorry

for any misunderstanding. I never meant to "rebuke" any of my poet-friends here or anywhere else. Please accept my apology if I unintentionally did. I've been learning meter for years now and yet I am relatively new to all this stuff if compared with the masters in this site, but I am proud of what I have already achieved. To label my ex. as an attempt is what we used to do as participants in the workshops, however, what I am seeking when I participate in each meter workshop is quite different. I have that ambition to develop as a poet with all the tools that I have each time I write.

wesley snow

wesley snow

8 years 1 month ago

This brings up a touchy subject.

My comments should probably be focused on the main thread for everyone, but since EVERYONE reads Rula's work I shall broach it here.

The work we do in this workshop is mechanical. Meaning we should be looking for the strictest of form at expense sometimes of art.
However, it should be taken to heart that metronomic rhythm is not only unnecessary, it is to be viewed as something of an evil.
The metronome is not art. A person will perhaps speak in a comfortable and repeatable metrical rhythm, but naturally will not strictly adhere to it.
Perfect meter is to be frowned upon as it doesn't represent natural speech.

So for the workshop... try to write as a metronome. We are learning the format and must think in square lines and round circles, but when we "write"... allow the format to lead, but not restrict.

There are many paths to the same place.