lou

Aug 22, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Summit

You perch upon your godforsacken summit
and watch as they teeter on theirs
extend solace, draw them to your boundary

They look back from theirs
near enough to speak;
self - sufficiency holds them where they are

Swim to shore and return to normality.
connect to the world
be one with reality.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

Comments

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Hi

Thanks I'll take a look.

Lou

scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

hi lou

pictured 2 gurus sitting on seperate mountain tops yelling at each other. enjoyed reading (rose already spotted the misspells lol).............stan

Candlewitch

13 years 11 months ago

Hey Lou,

Swim to shore and return to normality.
connect to the world
be one with reality.

I had the same mental picture in my head as Stan, LOL!

always, Cat

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Hey Cat and Stan

I can see why yu would think that, but the poem about how we are basically alone, but sometimes we want to reach out.

Lou

weirdelf

13 years 11 months ago

"No man is an island"?

The last line sounds like orders, which I, and most poets don't respond to well!

But well written, good concept, and great to see you diversifying.

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Jess

That is obviously your perception of the last line, but I had no intention of giving orders.

Glad you liked it.

Lou

weirdelf

13 years 10 months ago

Yes, it is my prejudice.

But don't ignore the subtext. I see these things.

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Jess

Each person has a right to their own perception

Lou

weirdelf

13 years 10 months ago

double post

sorry

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Jess

. Thanks for commenting

Lou