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Jul 09, 2014
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Sure you do stare
Sure you stare
I gaze at you
as you stare
then watch you take off
with your lovely pair
despite not much hair
in any case I'm bald
I don't care who
at my head does
gaze or stare
as long as they leave my balance hair
I'd love their stare.
take care
yours too!!!
I seem to share...
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
11 years ago
I don't get it
Do you really care?
as long as they leave my balance hair? The one you brush across?
Ian.T
11 years ago
Jess
Maybe there is a faint chance, that our loved is referring to the hair inside the inner ear canal that is excited by a gritty material which gives us a sense of Balance.
No that's going to far outside of our thinking, just have to accept the line is wrong ???
Take care Y'all I still love you no matter what,
Yours Ian.T
There's a little titter running around the room here, I shall capture it with serious thought, and send it on.. La, La.
lovedly
11 years ago
Ian
thanks for the interlude
lovedly
11 years ago
hahahaha...at times
I need give reference to Ian's
lovedly
11 years ago
juss for the moment as time prohibits its promulgation
A TRIBUTE TO AN AUSSIE POET PAR EXCELLENCE JESS
George Bernard Shaw said
"The reasonable man adapts himself to the world;
the unreasonable one persists in trying
to adapt the world to himself.
Therefore, all progress depends on the unreasonable man."
I have also swum against the current
all my life
even though I ain't a swimmer
yes
et all breathless!
Many friends fall by the way side
as I alone stride
the world takes a pride
when one has gone aside
then one is remembered
on an off occasion
at times
some are forgotten
ere!!!
you are young my Jess
a friend indeed
I now guess
But for you I do profess
none would have ever read me
Yes
Oh!
JESS! (((((((.In caps