Sway

I’m tired of my regrets
rattling their chains around mockingly
People who never said goodbye
and things I could have done better

Like gaudy pieces of costume jewelry
the laments hang around my neck
baubles with no value I can see

The fake diamonds sparkle too
Drawing my attention away
as they seek to cause a distraction
from an elusive calmness

If I leave the bandages in place
firmly affixed as they are,
to cover the guilt and remorse
in all their varied hues,
the blue, the red, and the black,
I know I would fool some
but not those I call friend

About This Poem

Last Few Words: With the last stanza, I was trying to convey that our regrets and imperfections are understood and accepted by our true friends. Wrestled quite a bit with this stanza. Not sure I pulled it off to my liking...

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Comments

scribbler

3 years 7 months ago

hello

Well I don't regret reading this lol. Line 15 try hues instead of colors and see if you like it better. A lot of motives quality in this poem

Michael Anthony