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Mar 22, 2012
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Sweet Sadist, Marry Me (The Masochist's Plea)
A split in the seams means you love me
Ripping a stitch is a rose
You tear out a vein
Leave me with my pain
Use my blood as ink for your prose
‘cause kindness is so overrated
And cruelty is always unsung
My life is for you
Our pleasures are true
Anguish is your mother tongue
The worst is still stretched far before us
And we hurt in the best of ways
Cracks in all my bones
At least I’m not alone
I ache for you, my end of days
Lay the barrel to rest on my temple
Trigger happy, having your fun
Without one guilty pang
I’ll go out with a bang
Nothing like a lover with a gun
About This Poem
Last Few Words: well now that we know i'm completely and totally insane... :p
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
emogothgirl
13 years 3 months ago
gotcha
i think i was shooting for a bit of symbolism with the rose thing; roses = love, stuff like that. but yes, i see where you're going. i will take a look at it, and maybe i'll use your suggestion! good to be read by you again :)
thanks,
mag
Nordic cloud
13 years 3 months ago
Use my blood as ink for your prose
Yowks. Very exciting this.
Ann
emogothgirl
13 years 3 months ago
ouch right?
i think we may all agree i'm going a little bit bonkers. but who says that's a bad thing? :)
thanks,
mag
Nordic cloud
13 years 3 months ago
A little bonkers is a good
A little bonkers is a good thing...?
Ann.