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Edward nigma
Edward nigma
Oct 12, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The sweet silver swallow

The sweet silver swallow
flys for tomorrow
Trying to leave all
It’s sorrow
behind.
For it soars
Towards the sun’s
Scintillating
Gates that holds
The stream of
future’ hopes.
and all
Past’s unaccomplished
Completely demolished
Dreams.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Virginia, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe homer Dante Alighieri Oscar Wilde , William Wordsworth

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c lynn brooks

4 years 9 months ago

Edward

well now what an improvement I see in your use of stanzas your poem is just lovely title is strong and your first line pulls that reader in to want to continue reading. well done!!

Edward nigma

Edward nigma

4 years 9 months ago

thank you

i hope your doing fine in this horrid time of mass hysteria