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Blue-eyed Bolla
Blue-eyed Bolla
Dec 31, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Sweetest Thing

Majestic is the royal rose,
and lovely is the lily.
The daisy's a delight that grows
upon the land so hilly.

A tulip field's a sunset gold,
poor poppies' hearts are bleeding.
The orchid is for luck, we're told.
A weed, no one is needing!

The lotus is the Buddha's bloom,
for love and peace is praying.
It thrives among the grime and gloom
in sacred breezes swaying.

The heather on the heath beguiles,
blithe buttercups have beauty.
The snowdrop in the snow, she smiles,
but only out of duty.

We leave it to the sweetest thing:
the violet, fresh from sleeping,
to sing to us the song of spring,
with joy to end all weeping.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: In the bleak mid winter looking forward to spring

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About the Author

Region, Country: Buxton, Derbyshire., GBR

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neopoet

neopoet

6 months 2 weeks ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "The Sweetest Thing" explores the beauty and symbolism of various flowers, painting a vivid picture of nature's diversity. The imagery is rich and evocative, creating a sense of wonder and appreciation for the natural world. The use of different flowers to convey emotions and meanings is effective in creating a tapestry of colors and feelings.

One suggestion for improvement could be to consider varying the structure or rhythm of the poem to add more depth and complexity. While the consistent rhyming scheme creates a sense of cohesion, experimenting with different poetic devices such as enjambment or varied line lengths could enhance the overall flow and impact of the poem.

Additionally, you may want to explore further the emotional resonance of each flower mentioned. Delving deeper into the significance of each flower beyond their physical attributes could add layers of meaning and create a more nuanced exploration of nature's beauty.

Overall, "The Sweetest Thing" is a charming and descriptive poem that celebrates the beauty of flowers. By incorporating more

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Lavender

Lavender

6 months 2 weeks ago

The Sweetest Thing

A joy to read this first day of the New Year! Hopeful and optimistic!
As usual, your rhyme and meter are wonderful. A touch of spring, here in mid-winter.
Thank you!
L

Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

6 months 2 weeks ago

This is lovely. Your imagery

This is lovely. Your imagery and descriptions are excellent. I am really jealous and I wish I had written this.
It has a fabulous quality about it, in its sing song rhythm.
Love it, Ruby xxx :)