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Jul 22, 2014
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Systematic Destruction...
Dull aches of the Lion-Heart
Fantasies smashed and left like wreckage
on the 'Yellow Brick Road'
The Wizard has left the scene
Shocked monkeys lie twitching
as he looks to the sky for the twister
that destroyed his beliefs
“We're not in Kansas anymore”
Tin-men don't cry, they just rust away
waiting for rescue.
The oil-can is empty
and gas is cheap.
Night settles around the breeding-grounds
The Velvet Fog of your voice
turns to sirens of despair
The bomb is waiting to explode
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Geezer
10 years 12 months ago
This is...
for my son Spencer, he is going through some rough times right now.
Roscoe Lane
10 years 12 months ago
This is,
This is a poem about real life versus our youthful dreams. Unfortunately as adults we're thrown into the lions den of reality. Your poem tells the story perfectly. Great work Regards Roscoe..
Geezer
10 years 12 months ago
Thanks Roscoe...
I had hoped that it would come across that way. ~ Gee
Geezer
4 years 8 months ago
Thank you...
I am pleased to report that my son is doing better. he still struggles, but has been helped by the removal of his thyroid as it was dysfunctioning, and now takes meds. he is my youngest and has three children, a lovely girlfriend and a job. ~ Geez.
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