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Esker
Esker
Nov 21, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

t o r r e n t p a i s l e y

stillness climbs
filling detrius daydream
touch the window
misted in its corners
and the sink
awakes in shadows
with another perfect
faucet drop

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: north ontario, CAN

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

13 years 11 months ago

Dear Esker,

Once again, your imagery is sublime, bringing your words to life within my mind!

always, Cat

Esker

Esker

13 years 11 months ago

Sublime

there is much to be said about subtlety (sp)
sometimes Its nice to listen to the rain
(although I enjoy a good torrent)

thank you

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 11 months ago

I just love...

the images that this one produces. Just one little thing; how about dropping the [and] from the line;
"and the sink awakes in shadows"? The lines preceding that, are another idea altogether. They should be separate lines, not connected with [and]. ~ Gee

Esker

Esker

13 years 11 months ago

Thank You for your comment G!

You are correct there is a separateness to that line
when I have more time I will try to edit these works
Now that Im not so afraid of them when I write
them and leave them here...!