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Esker
Esker
Nov 21, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

t o r r e n t p a i s l e y

stillness climbs
filling detrius daydream
touch the window
misted in its corners
and the sink
awakes in shadows
with another perfect
faucet drop

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: north ontario, CAN

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

13 years 7 months ago

Dear Esker,

Once again, your imagery is sublime, bringing your words to life within my mind!

always, Cat

Esker

Esker

13 years 7 months ago

Sublime

there is much to be said about subtlety (sp)
sometimes Its nice to listen to the rain
(although I enjoy a good torrent)

thank you

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 7 months ago

I just love...

the images that this one produces. Just one little thing; how about dropping the [and] from the line;
"and the sink awakes in shadows"? The lines preceding that, are another idea altogether. They should be separate lines, not connected with [and]. ~ Gee

Esker

Esker

13 years 7 months ago

Thank You for your comment G!

You are correct there is a separateness to that line
when I have more time I will try to edit these works
Now that Im not so afraid of them when I write
them and leave them here...!