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Oct 14, 2013
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a t r o p h i n
stale palm
the sweat work pallour
knocks the sun slipping
honorary scars
and sun dyed cars
a desert blossom
in a cacti needle forest
glistening sting
knuckle
fallen
rest
with overcast
shades
a ventilators
steps
risen
and dropping
barometric
loves flame
in the cupola
of a pilot game
take wing
pretty verse
in a slipstream
orchid dusk
pressed
on peaches
of gravity
banquets of forgiveness
these hundred mile
shadows
wrung across
the skin
of time
fragrant of
concubine
caress
cherry lip gloss
and antiseptics
life is a width
a droplet
a measure
like rain
tethered
to heaven
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
mand
11 years 9 months ago
You have some lovely phrases
You have some lovely phrases here. These are my favourite:
in a slipstream
orchid dusk
pressed
on peaches
of gravity
across
the skin of time
like rain
tethered
to heaven
Love Mand xxx
Esker
11 years 9 months ago
jet stream
dusk..think of the popular american desert sky scenes
dry air so the clarity is fine..Like our cold air here
at times...past dusk the rays of light seek skywward
and the jet trails become alive with pinks
and tans...against the violet or fuscia
I see color i do..
peachs feel good
mand
11 years 9 months ago
Sound stunningly beautiful!
Sound stunningly beautiful! and you describe it so well! You have a wonderful way with words. ( a word smith ).
LOve Mand xxxx
Esker
11 years 9 months ago
white sands the dune flesh and startled down...
a cold atllantic hour
pausing
in a thunder surf surrender
holding
moments in the shell