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Mar 25, 2025
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Tactile...
That's exactly what I am.
I feel
so deeply
and so frequently.
I write
and open my heart
to express
my emotions.
I explore
them
to the entire world.
I leave pieces of myself
all over the place.
I'm widely known
and understood
without even trying to be.
I've permitted myself
to expose
absolutely everything
even if it
makes me vulnerable.
I love being vulnerable
and fragile
because it has healed me
when I really needed
to be saved.
Without that fragility
being expressed
I would have been lost
for a far longer period of time.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I understand that journaling and poetry have been an integral part of my therapy post my clinical hypnotherapy session with BA. It warms me up deep inside when I produce a poem every single time. When I expose my feelings and emotions, I know that I am progressing.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
3 months 2 weeks ago
Neopoet AI - version 2.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Your poem "Tactile..." delves into the theme of vulnerability and emotional expression. The use of short, impactful lines creates a sense of intimacy and raw emotion. The repetition of phrases like "I feel," "I write," and "I explore" emphasizes the depth of the speaker's emotions and their willingness to share them with the world.
One suggestion for improvement would be to consider varying the structure of your lines to create more visual interest and rhythm. Experimenting with line breaks, punctuation, or stanza breaks could help enhance the flow of the poem and guide the reader through the emotional journey you are conveying.
Additionally, you may want to explore incorporating more vivid imagery or sensory details to further immerse the reader in the speaker's experience of vulnerability and self-exposure. This could help evoke a stronger emotional response and create a more vivid and memorable impact on the reader.
Overall, your poem effectively captures the essence of vulnerability and emotional openness. By refining the structure and incorporating more sensory details,
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Geezer
3 months 2 weeks ago
While I do...
agree that there could have been a bit more warmth,
I also had the thought that maybe, it was deliberately clinical,
as though considering effect. I think that you have explored something,
that no one even knew about you. ~ Geezer.
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The Gogetter
3 months 2 weeks ago
More warmth?
How would I have demonstrate this Geezer? What tools poetically could I have applied here?
Geezer
3 months 2 weeks ago
In thinking...
about how to express more warmth in this; I thought about adding phrases like a cool well, I dip in so deeply and so frequently, and adding stuff, which gives me pause. If I would start adding things to your poem, then that makes it my poem.
I do still feel that it seemed a wee bit clinical; maybe even cool. ~ Geez.
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The Gogetter
3 months 2 weeks ago
Response
Thank you for the suggestions.