The Tale of Jack and Jill

They loved each other so, yet not so blind
to make no provision for death (or parting;
after all, we all need fresh meat ere long
and we soon can tire of any lover's farting).
So Jack and Jill went to a legal eagle sharp
and devised a plan to split their worldly chattels,
in the sad event their love should turn to hate
and their kisses change to vicious battles,
or even worse the Reaper might pay a call
and into their graves cause them to fall.
But they never read the small print on the deeds;
and when Jack and Jill fell down the hill
they never knew what happened to their money;
(their shyster lawyer's hands were in the til).

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: London, Culture Capital of the World

Favorite Poets: Siegfried Sassoon, Wilfred Owen, Rupert Brooke, Chaucer, Shakespeare to name but a few. And VERY IMPORTANTLY: Erich Fried, a leftwing Austrian of Jewish ancestry who fled the Nazis and became a British citizen in 1949., And, other writers (non-poets mainly): Raymond Chandler, Irvine Welsh, Anthony Burgess, Graham Greene, Charles Bukowski, John le Carré, Anthony Horowitz, Mick Herron, Margaret Attwood, Edna O'Brian, Maeve Binchy., Writers who I find vastly over-rated: TS Eliot, Virgina Woolf, Sylvia Plath, Phil Larkin, E.A. Poe, A. Ginsburg, Longfellow, Gerald Manley Hopkins (actually I LOATHE Hopkins more than damson-dappled words can say).

Comments

Geezer

5 years 4 months ago

The rhyme...

was good and though the rhythm a bit ragged, I understood the whole of the message. You should always give a trusted person a copy of the will. ~ Geezer.
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Edna Sweetlove

5 years 4 months ago

Ta -

...I agree the metre is crap but I was pissed at the time.
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Gracy

5 years 4 months ago

Hi Edna, indeed, as Geez says

Hi Edna, indeed, as Geez says, give a copy of the will to a trusted person. Difficult decision, one can let a lawyer or a bank keep them, but, who knows...
I laughed at your use of Jack and Jill to highlight your theme. You have good end rhymes, I don't know about the meter.
All in all, a great topic, as well as amusing. Gracy

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 4 months ago

You are right...

...the metre stinks.

But who cares?
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Edna Sweetlove

5 years 4 months ago

Thanks for your comment...

...which I have to say confused me a little. I cannot accept I am in any way "aggressive" - assertive, yes; opinionated, yes. And I would not change that. My politics are reflected in many things I write and I make no excuse for them. I too detest Brexit and its nationalistic flag-waving jingoistic supporters.
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Edna Sweetlove

5 years 4 months ago

One of two of my acquaintances...

...voted for Brexit. I hope it bankrupts them. I will laugh at them in the dole queue.
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Edna Sweetlove

5 years 4 months ago

It is indeed ironic...

...that at the very time the UK needs its European neighbours, people like Johnson, Gove & Cummings are heading for a no-deal Brexit.
I just hope my own wealth will protect me and my family.

Sod the silly buggers in the North who voted for Johnson.
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