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Nov 16, 2017
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Tangle Falls
Cascading water, escaping it's frozen jail,
dancing over rocks, it anxiously fell,
glacier water escaping it's genesis years,
bouncing over rocks, falling like tears,
it jigged and it jogged,
tangoing over fallen logs,
a tangled foot began to slip,
it suddenly lost it's grip,
I fall, fall, into the falls,
I fall, heeding their call,
I fall for it's charms,
falling into it's arms,
I fall, feeling their force,
I fall, following their course,
as it enfolded me,
I fall, fall into eternity.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Tangle Falls is a series of falls up by Jasper Alberta. They have inspired this piece as well as a canvas.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
trekker
7 years 8 months ago
Comment
Thank you for your reply and comment. It is truly appreciated. I will edit the it's in the piece. Comma's and apostrophe's always confused this poet. I truly welcome your comments. Your piece below your signature I love especially the way it flows. It reads like the waters of of a free spirit especially tying fire, the moon and night together which you top off with the mystical insight of our inner beings. Thank you again. trekker
swamp-witch
7 years 8 months ago
Hello Trekker,
I also really loved the rhythm and literary devices in the poem, like Steph mentioned. I am looking at images of Tangle Falls now. Fantastic! Thank you for this poem. It let me go on a magical little adventure.
Kelsey