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TheDarkOne
TheDarkOne
Nov 16, 2015 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Into Tartarus

A single step
echoes in the stillness
My feet seer on the Brimstone
Flakes of yellow shattered around it
Eyes locked on a figure in the distance
Familiar...
strange

Waking dreams.
Shadows of thought.
What else lays unseen in the Dark?
Faded ghosts linger between the eye and the mind
Real or illusion?

I draw breath
cold, desolate
A World no more than a memory
Whispers all around me
Time, dead
A moment eternal

Smiles.
A shuddering heart
Who haunts whom?
I peer into a World no longer mine
The Darkness beckons.
I take another step

MML 2015/11/15

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Cape, South Africa, ZAF

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Comments

emeka ozurumba

emeka ozurumba

9 years 11 months ago

really classic imagery

I like the way the plot is unraveling into the perplexed nature of understanding dreams in relevance to the soul or life in relevance to death

R

raj

9 years 11 months ago

Excellent word usage with so

Excellent word usage with so many unique verses, not sure which one is better than the other...

Regards,

TheDarkOne

TheDarkOne

9 years 10 months ago

Strangely enough, I am

Strangely enough, I am returned from a hiatus of peace and tranquility. It's only when things are tumultuous that the writing comes.

Sparrow

Sparrow

9 years 11 months ago

Oh Dark One

Dare you dwell in those places, well I think the answer is yes if it produces a write as this one.
I look forward to your next pieces,
Yours, Ian..