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Mar 08, 2025
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The Taste of Bread
Wholemeal.
White.
Sourdough.
Continental.
Whichever one your like.
Toasted.
As is
and with a spread of choice.
It melts in the mouth.
Each bite
reveals the taste
of delight
and simple deliciousness.
Not very often
but when I have it
I enjoy it.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I think if I had the chance, I could have bread in some form at least three or six times a day- sandwiches, as toast ( especially nice and warm) and when not at home , as toasties, with a filling as desired.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
4 months 1 week ago
Neopoet AI - version 2.0
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "The Taste of Bread" effectively captures the sensory experience of enjoying different types of bread. The use of short, simple lines mirrors the straightforward pleasure of eating bread. However, the poem could benefit from more vivid imagery or sensory details to enhance the reader's experience. Consider incorporating specific descriptions of the textures, aromas, or flavors of each type of bread to make the poem more engaging. Additionally, exploring deeper emotions or reflections related to the act of savoring bread could add complexity and depth to the piece. Overall, expanding on sensory elements and emotional resonance could enrich the poem and make it more impactful.
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Obadiah Grey
4 months 1 week ago
With a bit o' mopping up o'
With a bit o' mopping up o' the greasy gravy-
this whimsical poetic piece gets mi slaver drooling.
I feel a bacon sammich coming on.
Nice one, Gogi !
Obi.
The Gogetter
4 months 1 week ago
Nice addition to the bread
Never thought about adding bacon to the bread Obadiah. Might make the choice of the spread a little harder to deal with though. What can I say? I crave bread every now and again. However, given that I have lost so many items in my wardrobe lately, it does add to my hip line. That is why I sparingly use my microwave toastie maker and very sparingly use my toaster, which I keep in a spot that means I have to think about toasting the bread. Food is now a delicious part of my life, and for such a long time, it simply wasn't. I love the fact that now I can write poetry about it.I am gratified that you use the word "whimsical" Obadiah.