Taste Of Infinity

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Taste Of Infinity" demonstrates a good use of metaphor and brevity. The use of the apple pie as a symbol for something eternal and superior is intriguing and leaves room for multiple interpretations.

However, there are areas where the poem could be improved. The transition from the abstract concept of eternity to the concrete image of the apple pie could be smoother. Perhaps introducing the apple pie earlier or using more imagery related to it throughout the poem would help to strengthen this metaphor.

The line "A spark moment of truth held me" could benefit from clarification. It's unclear what this moment of truth is and how it relates to the rest of the poem. Providing more context or explanation could improve the overall coherence of the poem.

The rhythm of the poem is somewhat inconsistent. The first four lines have a similar length and rhythm, but this pattern is not maintained in the rest of the poem. Consistency in rhythm can help to create a more satisfying reading experience.

Lastly, the word "Superior" seems to be used as an adjective without a clear noun to modify. If it's intended to describe the apple pie, it might be more effective to place it closer to the word "pie" or to rephrase the line for clarity.

Overall, the poem has a compelling concept and interesting imagery, but could benefit from clearer transitions, more consistent rhythm, and more precise language.

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This was beautiful and concise. I liked the way you connected heaven and earth. I haope your are safe and comfotable! John

Hello, Rula,
I agree with Leslie - this is heavenly! (I felt a bit like Eve in Eden!)
Thank you!
Lx

Apple pie, a nice journey from forbidden fruit, tamed and claimed into heavenly! nice job *hugs, Cat xx