tyro

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A Tear

A single tear wells
in the corner of an eye,

moves slowly down the cheek,
suspended there, takes light
like a magnificent diamond
before pursuing art to the floor

This tear, this water spot,
this tangible manifestation,
condensed from the intangible
and there to return

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: The Nederlands

Favorite Poets: William Butler Yates, Wallace Stevens, Giuseppe ungaretti, William Blake

Comments

chevyvent

7 years 2 months ago

Great Piece Just Some Thoughts

Very beautiful Poem of God's love for us and he wants us to set our gaze upon Him and not our worries and troubles we can trust that he will always be with us until the end that the Lord promise with an oath. Also, He has given to us his own faith when He prayed for us in dark Gethsemane.We need to see through His eyes that what He promised He will do.I especially enjoyed these beautiful lines

raj

7 years 2 months ago

Hi Tyro

Nice description of a tear and its manifestation in a poetic form...I couldn't understand though what you meant by "and there to return"...

nicely done...
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tyro

7 years 2 months ago

Thanks for the reply Mario.

Thanks for the reply Mario. The poem does pertain to the spiritual, but not explicitly to God.

tyro

7 years 2 months ago

Hi Raj

the tear is called up by an emotion (intangible) . When it appears it becomes tangible, when it becomes a water spot it is still tangible, but soon no trace will be left to the senses.

raj

7 years 2 months ago

Thanks Tyro

for the perception..makes more sense...thanks for posting...
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raj

7 years 2 months ago

Hi again Tyro

On reading your poem again..i thought i should ask if "this droplet of water" would be more succinct...just my thought...ignore it if you don't feel it to be right.. also please consider if it should be "wail" or "well" in the context of your poem
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tyro

7 years 2 months ago

"This droplet of water" does

"This droplet of water" does have merit, I will give it some thought.

I like wells, but it seems not well known because I go in trouble with it in my poem daughter, as well.

Both times I was using it as a verb, though without the object, perhaps that's the problem.

verb (used without object)
9.
to rise, spring, or gush, as water, from the earth or some other source (often followed by up, out, or forth):
Tears welled up in my eyes.

raj

7 years 2 months ago

I understand an issue you are

I understand an issue you are dealing with about distinguishing between well and wail....i suggest you visit dictionary.com which may bring clarity...

ultimately it was just a suggestion..it's your poem so go by what you feel is the right choice between the two options
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weirdelf

7 years 2 months ago

Great piece, that second stanza

"moves slowly down the cheek,
suspended there, takes light
like a magnificent diamond
before pursuing art to the floor"

Is pure bloody poetic brilliance!

tyro

7 years 2 months ago

Hello raj, I will stick with

Hello raj, I will stick with wells, as this is a slow process of the eye becoming moist, and the tear slowly forming. By wail I would expect a torrent of tears, not a single one.
I greatly appreciate your interest and suggestions, thanks.

tyro

7 years 2 months ago

Thank your very much Weirdelf

Thank your very much Weirdelf for the complement.

Rula

7 years 2 months ago

Tyro... I echo

all the positive comments above.
This is a very passionate, tender write if you know what I mean.
Thanks for sharing. Always looking to reading your work.

raj

7 years 2 months ago

Hi tyro

Though not directly focused on A Tear you may read a poem about overwhelming of which a tear is an outcome which i had written a long long time back

https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/poems/handkerchief
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lovedly

7 years 2 months ago

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tyro

7 years 2 months ago

Hello dear Rula

Hello dear Rula
it's always a pleasure to see you reply to one of my poems. May your part of the world find peace.

tyro

7 years 2 months ago

Thanks lovely, for your

Thanks lovely, for your support on 'wells'.

lovedly

7 years 2 months ago

great

you do excel
I have composed and posted one
as well

IRiz

7 years 2 months ago

Nice poem, however, please be

Nice poem, however, please be careful with diamonds and tears, stars and hearts, and roses.
Poetry is everywhere let's not crowd on a few designated poetic words.
Your image of running on the cheeck tear is great, the way a tear catches a glint of light before taking a fall is brilliant, by comparing it to a diamond you taking away its fragile ephemeral beauty and giving it strength of the gem. Is that your intention?

tyro

7 years 2 months ago

"by comparing it to a diamond

"by comparing it to a diamond you taking away its fragile ephemeral beauty and giving it strength of the gem. Is that your intention?"

No, that is not my intention. I thought only on the sparkle, and did not consider the other implications of the symbol. Thanks for bringing this to my attention, it should help me be more attentive of my words in the future. I hope your mind opening message can take hold in me, and not dull over time.
thanks..

IRiz

7 years 2 months ago

You are so kind accepting my

You are so kind accepting my point of view.
It is a rare gift. I am looking forward to productive exchange of the comments.
Sincerely, Irene.