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Feb 23, 2025
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The Tear Drop
I'm the tear drop
the shape
that holds you in
and keeps you
firm.
I come
in different shapes
and colours,
and in different styles.
The tear drop shape
gives me confidence
when I wear
my clothes.
Not the real tear drop.
I don't need that
at all.
But the shape
above my waist
that makes me feel
like a woman.
The general word
to cover this
is
lingerie.
I like
the personal service
when I get a fitting
with an expert.
That's what I did today.
It was great.
I love
that particular shop.
The fitters are highly competent.
Danielle
was amazing.
I left the shop
with exactly
what I wanted.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Despite the sticky , hot weather, I decided to take advantage of where I was in the shopping centre zone,and have a bra fitting. I went to one of my favourite shops in Burke Road, Camberwell. Danielle, was a wonderful fitter, and managed to get me what I was looking for. You wouldn't think that it could be a subject for a poem , but I continued to ponder the words "tear drop", and that is when I produced this one.
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4 months 2 weeks ago
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Geezer
4 months 2 weeks ago
Teardrop...
is not exactly what I think of when I see lingerie, but I can see the simile. And why not, write a poem about purchasing such a piece of intimate apparel? Nicely done, ~ Geezer.
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