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Tears are hot

But my heart is craving silence

It's loved too much

Respite
Respite
Respite

Make the noise stop

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: ZAF

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neopoet

neopoet

4 months 4 weeks ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Tears are hot" conveys a strong sense of emotional turmoil and a desire for peace and quiet. The repetition of "Respite" emphasizes the need for relief from the overwhelming noise and intensity of emotions. The contrast between the hot tears and the craving for silence creates a vivid image of inner conflict. Consider exploring further the reasons behind the emotional intensity and how the speaker copes with it. Additionally, you may want to experiment with different poetic devices to enhance the depth and impact of your message.

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Leslie

Leslie

4 months 3 weeks ago

Kowque

No shit, I get it I hope that your trials don't get the best of you! Just keep writinng and please stay in touch good friend your pain and suffering someday will come to an end and if they don't I guess that that is the way it is supposed to be! You cannot have pleasure without some sort of pain. Opposition in all things is something that we all must deal with. I hope that you are are safe and that you still have visits with your daughter. She must be growing up as all of us do. Send me an email if you have the time. I'd love to hear from you, so send me a line or two. Thanks for your friendship and knnow this, I'm doing just fine!

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 months 2 weeks ago

Dear Koki,

I know this feeling... it reminds me of butter, being spread too thin....! good work!

always, Cat