TELL ME.

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

The poem articulates a clear preference for poetry that entertains, excites, and stirs the imagination, rather than instructs or moralizes. The speaker’s voice is consistent and direct, establishing a strong persona from the outset. The rhyme scheme is mostly regular and contributes to a sing-song, almost balladic quality, which aligns with the poem’s stated love for tales and songs.

The poem’s imagery is vivid in places, especially in the stanzas referencing pirates, highwaymen, and supernatural elements. Lines such as “Rain thunder and lightning that rip the skies bodice” employ metaphor and personification to animate the natural world, though the phrase “rip the skies bodice” may feel overwrought or forced, potentially distracting from the intended effect.

The poem’s treatment of gender is traditional and may be read as uncritical of certain stereotypes—women as either angelic or seductive, men as passive recipients of these qualities. This binary approach could be reconsidered for greater nuance or subversion, depending on the poet’s intentions.

The poem’s structure is largely consistent, but some lines are metrically awkward or syntactically strained to fit the rhyme (e.g., “Rain thunder and lightning that rip the skies bodice”). Occasional attention to meter and line length could improve the poem’s musicality and flow.

The closing stanzas return to the poem’s central thesis: a rejection of didacticism in favor of passion and enjoyment. The repetition of “please don’t preach” reinforces this, though the poem risks redundancy by reiterating its message without significant variation.

Overall, the poem is successful in expressing a personal poetic credo and in evoking the kinds of stories and emotions the speaker values. Further refinement of imagery, attention to meter, and reconsideration of certain stereotypes could deepen the poem’s impact.

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to the notion of traditional views here but think that they work well for the poem. My only criticism is of the meter, but you know that it is not imperative, many of the old bards were not strong on meter either. So, good piece. ~ Geez.

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Hello, Alex,

A true passionate bard. Wonderful!

My only suggestion would be the title and the word "tell" throughout.  Seems passion should almost rupture visually.

"Show Me" 

Thank you!

L