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Thank You Lord
Thank you O lord;
You give life to the trees,
To hills and mountains,
Rivers flow gently for human kind,
Pebbles adore its beauty
And shades over its depth.
Thank you O lord;
You give life to the sun
To give life to the trees,
When its branches cut off;
It never stops reaching the light
With blooming flowers.
Thank you O lord;
You give life to air
Which comfort human every time,
Our sincere friend
We breathe in and out
To live some certain years.
Thank you O lord;
You give life to birds
To sing everyday a composed song,
Clearly in the heart of the forest
Without a trumpet.
Thank you O lord
For given us life.
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Comments
Candlewitch
3 years 1 month ago
hello,
this looks like a very nice poem. but I am not a believer in any organized religions god. besides that, I have sent you a "private message" (p.m.)
*hugs, Cat
Ray Whitaker
3 years 1 month ago
I like the form you chose to stick to
Welcome to this site!
i hope you will continue to post your work here, and become an active participant here. you'll become a petter poet if you do.
Ray