Theater Macabre (revised)

Glad to see you here still and how are you doing? I thought this poem was about the recent theater massacre. I see it is not. I like it but what is this
xhards
Unless you meant chards:)

Would love to hear from you and how is Dan the Man doing?

Love to you and the family
Mona
Miss you too!

powerful

just a couple of thoughts
‘hushing the sequined crowd’ – i avoid gerunds where possible – ‘hush the sequined crowd’ ?

‘awakens the sots’ – perhaps ‘awaken’ without the ‘s’ – to bring the tense in line with the rest of the write…

typo ? ‘performing on xhards of broken glass’ = do you mean ‘shards’ ?

‘in a mad chase
ending in capture
in a red illumed cage
in a torn gown of velvet and tattered lace

– a lot of ‘in’s - I’d lose some
‘a mad chase
ending in capture
a red illumed cage
and a torn gown of velvet and tattered lace’

I’d also suggest that you space it a bit for better digestion

awesome imagery here cat
a great write

love judy
xxx