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Nov 14, 2024
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Therapy Sessions
In some way, no matter how bad things got or how low I’d get
For some reason it felt like I hadn’t hit rock bottom yet
My premonition told me there was one more bullet to take
So I bit it, jumped in the flame and put it all at stake
But I paid dearly, nearly lost my sanity dealing with it
I looked for signs and some other guidelines to help me get through
While I was fighting depression writing made an impression
Like deep cuts spilling my guts on paper gave me a new view
I liked letting the ink bleed from my pen again and again
Shining a bright light on the deepest recesses of my mind
I mined for wisdom and truth no matter how tough, rough or smooth
And the poetry offered reflection, insightful and kind
The freedoms in expression became my therapy sessions
Throwing up rhymes in dark times opened more opportunities
So I put ire fire in verses versus the spells and curses
Fully immersed in a world of endless possibilities
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
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neopoet
7 months 1 week ago
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Therapy Sessions" effectively utilizes metaphor and imagery to convey the speaker's emotional journey. The metaphor of the pen bleeding ink is particularly striking, as it suggests the cathartic release of writing. However, the poem could benefit from more varied sentence structure and rhythm to enhance its musicality.
The poem's theme of writing as therapy is clear and compelling, but the narrative could be more nuanced. For instance, the speaker's struggle with depression is mentioned but not fully explored. Developing this aspect of the poem could add depth and complexity to the speaker's journey.
The use of rhyme is consistent throughout the poem, but some lines seem forced to fit the rhyme scheme. For example, "So I put ire fire in verses versus the spells and curses" is somewhat awkward and disrupts the flow of the poem. Experimenting with different rhyme schemes or using slant rhyme could alleviate this issue.
Lastly, the poem's language is generally clear and accessible, but some phrases are clichéd or vague. For example, "jumped in the flame and put it all at stake" is a familiar phrase that doesn't add much to the poem's imagery or emotional impact. Replacing such phrases with more original and specific language could enhance the poem's vividness and emotional resonance.
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Wallyroo92
7 months ago
Therapy Sessions
Thank you.
I will take the suggestions into consideration.
W
Candlewitch
7 months 1 week ago
Dear W.
This is a poem I can well relate to!!! I understand it completely. Writing is always exceptional therapy. the lines I liked best are:
The freedoms in expression became my therapy sessions
Throwing up rhymes in dark times opened more opportunities
So I put ire fire in verses versus the spells and curses
Fully immersed in a world of endless possibilities
hugs, Cat
Wallyroo92
7 months ago
Therapy Sessions
Good afternoon Cat,
Glad this resonated with you. Poetry can be so therapeutic but I love spitting up rhyme every chance I get.
W
Leslie
7 months 1 week ago
Therapy Sessions!
Great poem, I totally get it. I have anger issues that won't go away unless I write it down. Great job and I hope that you'll look at some of mine too! I really hope this mechanism works wonders for you!
Wallyroo92
7 months ago
Therapy Sessions
Greetings Leslie, hope all is well.
Thank you for reading and commenting.
Yes, poetry helps express those frustrations and emotions that are hard to convey. Overtime it's become such a big part of my life I love setting that time of the day/week to write and express. I hope it does the same for you.
I'm glad to have joined this community and I'm looking to reading many of you folks here.
W