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Aug 12, 2022
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THEY PASSED ME
They passed me
as the best circus poet
had fun
to read my poems
they all are on the run
join em newer poets have fun
older ones have enjoyed
ah no pun........
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ray Whitaker
2 years 11 months ago
Who’s passing who?
The English Rock band
A genuine inquiry
Owls speaking in the night
Now, if it’s “whom” that’s another country heard from
lovedly
2 years 11 months ago
cool
not cold thanks new poet of neo
Lord Barham
2 years 10 months ago
first up!
I like your poems when they are somewhat enigmatic, as this one is! Who passed you? Did they pass you as in you passed a test of some kind, or did they pass you while you were out for a jog? Double meanings double the fun! One comment, to go with the flow, pun could be worked in with "on the run" in the final line, though I am not sure how you might do this (and would rather not offer suggestions anyway, since, if you agree, you will come up with something a lot better than I would).
lovedly
2 years 10 months ago
INDISPOSED
Later when I go
DOWN UNDER
may match up
pun with fun
lol