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THINGS YOU SAY

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THINGS YOU SAY

 

Oh , I knew you wouldn’t go without a whisper,

And I knew you wouldn’t go without a scene-

A love that was burning out, not turning crisper:

 A love that might as well have never been…

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Oh, you bore me to the seams

With your sorrows and your dreams,

And the tales of things you gave up just for me-

You tell me when I came,

That I was bound in mental chains,

But you never really tried to set me free!

And I'm going…

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You say it hurts so much

For you to speak about your past,

And then you tell me of the many things you've lost-

You tell me when I came

That I was blind and I was lame,

But you give me sight and freedom at what cost!

And I'm gone…

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 If you'd like to hear the sung version, please click on the link below:

http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=7023124

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About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Asia, India, IND

Favorite Poets: Leonard Cohen, Bob Dylan, Roger Waters, Jim Croce, Paul Simon (...albeit not necessarily in that order)

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Comments

Psyve

Psyve

14 years 6 months ago

Mona

Thank you, glad you enjoyed this one.
Psyve

Psyve

Psyve

14 years 6 months ago

Anna,

Thank you for reading / listening to this one and commenting.
Am flattered you are adding this to your favourites list. :-)
Psyve

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scribbler

14 years 6 months ago

things

break ups are caused by many reasons and seldom go smoothly. Very enjoyable...................scribbler

Psyve

Psyve

14 years 6 months ago

Scribbler,

Thank you for stopping by to comment.
Pleased you found this an enjoyable read.
Psyve

Psyve

Psyve

14 years 6 months ago

Seren

Thank you for listening and reading. Pleased you enjoyed this one.

Psyve

Psyve

Psyve

14 years 6 months ago

Shirley,

Am glad you enjoyed this song.
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
Psyve

lou

lou

14 years 6 months ago

hi

a sad comment on the state of a relationship. good job.

lou

Psyve

Psyve

14 years 6 months ago

Lou,

Thnks for stopping by and commenting.

Psyve

mand

mand

14 years 6 months ago

Hi Psyve

I love the raw emotion you put into your poetry. I could imagine this piece being acted out on the stage! and the tense atmosphere would have the audience rivited.

You held my attention in a dynamic way.

Well done

Love Mand xxxxxxx