Rula

Nov 26, 2014 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Thought

Judge not what thou hast oft in sight,
as deep must live the soul.
Thy naked eyen might tell thee lies,
whilst hearts shall tell it all.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Just experimenting a less modern language. Hope you don't mind it. :)

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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Comments

raj

10 years 7 months ago

Rula

Very thoughtful poem about trusting the heart call.

Regards,

Rula

10 years 7 months ago

Thank you raj

So kind of you to drop in with such a nice comment.
I always thought the English less modern language is really charming.

raj

10 years 7 months ago

i appreciate your intent to

i appreciate your intent to innovate. Keep it up please.

Regards,

lovedly

10 years 7 months ago

eyen

is the less modern word for "eyes" Loved.

Ian.T

10 years 7 months ago

Twix your God and the essence of all things, is a domain we shall call Heaven, because it is too beautiful for any other word.
That we shall dwell within this domain in perfection, is a task that we must try to achieve.
There shall be only a love of an energy that will eclipse all other things, there we shall be free of all man made stupidity,
Yours as always, Ian

Rula

10 years 7 months ago

Ian

totally agree. I like how you've said it all.

wesley snow

10 years 7 months ago

By all means should you experiment.

On anything.
The language you mimic is Old English.

Rula

10 years 7 months ago

Thank you sir!

Like it? :)

judyanne

10 years 7 months ago

i love this little shortie Rula

but 'soul' and ''all'' is a weak rhyme (imo)
lol - it may be my aussie accent, but i think
''whilst hearts shall tell the whole.' might work better ???

this little beautie trips awesomely over the tongue when read aloud
love judy
xxx

Rula

10 years 7 months ago

or it might be

my Arabic accent judyanne.
Let me think abt. this for some time. I am really happy with it at the moment.
I am happy you're back to pick on mine. (smiles)

wesley snow

10 years 7 months ago

Yes of course I like it.

I love all that you write even with the occasional flaw. It's a good poem even without the new language.

Bella Cicerona

10 years 7 months ago

Excellent

I like how concisely you wrote this poem. A moral in verse--very lovely