Thoughts of You

If you were here
I'd offer cake
then take
your lovely smile in
while watching as you
hold your plate,
its chocolate disappearing.

If you were here
I'd comb your hair
then care
for any need within
your weary soul, as you
sit and wait
the end of day

nearing.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Comments

Geezer

5 months ago

Thoughts...

of loved ones do not pass on, as people do. Their habits, the way they smiled, the personal things we did with and for them.
It's all we have left, but it has to be enough. I see many things here, my own included. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

4 months 4 weeks ago

Hello, Geezer,

Love your thoughts with this. I was thinking of loved ones I no longer have with this, but also anyone who is needing any comfort, consolation, or a kind gesture.
Thank you for reading!
L