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c lynn brooks
Apr 24, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
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THREE MANES AND A DREAM(April Contest)

I felt the ground below being erased
I felt the wind upon my face
I felt the strength of an embrace

I saw the wide open plains
I saw the flurry of three manes
I saw the sky begin to rain

No shelter was there to be found
so we traversed o'er the rain soaked ground
I heard the hooves melodic sound
or was I hearing our hearts pound?

I touched the softness of your skin
the earth was quaking from within

I tasted the flavor of desire
a dream of all senses
I awoke on fire

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: north carolina usa, USA

Favorite Poets: Leonard Cohen, Edgar Alan Poe, ray Bradbury, John Grissom, .Alan S Jeeves James patterson,

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c lynn brooks

5 years 2 months ago

Melinda

welcome to Neo Poet
Thank you so much your comments are very kind

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c lynn brooks

5 years 2 months ago

Alan

thank you ,yes I do rhyme every now and then
have you figured out the three manes lol

Gracy

Gracy

5 years 2 months ago

Good poem, Lynn. I like the

Good poem, Lynn. I like the rhyming lines. I think perhaps the three manes are invaders, I've read about them somewhere. Medieval?
Enjoyed.

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c lynn brooks

5 years 2 months ago

gracy

lol not even close but good try.thank you for stopping to read I appreciate it

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scribbler

5 years 2 months ago

Hi

A very good poem but I reckon most poems in this contes of give me your best will be good lol. You might consider deleting "her" in stanza 3, line 2 and see if you like it

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c lynn brooks

5 years 2 months ago

Stan

thre is no her in this poem I'm not understanding what you refer to.ahhh I see it now that is o'er not her as in over and that I think I will leave I tried removing it did not car for it that way thanks for the suggestion

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c lynn brooks

5 years 2 months ago

melinda

you are so close yes it is a dream as you stated in the first part but the three manes
man long black hair, women lond blonde hair riding double and the third mane is the horse lol

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c lynn brooks

5 years 2 months ago

jerry

never to late, thank you for your kind comment