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Nov 06, 2024
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Thunder storm!
Giant thunderheads
formed over the open plains.
Rain fell, throughout the night.
Lightning struck
in the distant sky.
Rolling thunder,
called like a distant drum,
throughout the humid
Oklahoma night.
Dad sat there so thoughtfully,
knowing how it all began.
Moisture in the southern winds
met with a cold icy northern breeze.
Hail and sleet fell
we sat there humbly
looking on.
Wondering when
it all would cease.
Morning, came with
an azure sky.
The raging storm
had passed us by!
About This Poem
Last Few Words: A typical scene of father and son on a stormy summer night!
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Candlewitch
8 months ago
Dear John,
Your words and lines, so cohesive, put me in mind of a tornado I was in the middle of in Minneapolis. I was alone, as my family was on vacation to the Black Hills in the Dakotas.sidewalks were ripped up by tree's roots . I went down to the basement and under the heavy laundry table for the worst of it...Oh those deadly winds!
my favorite lines of this poem are:
we sat there humbly
looking on.
Wondering when
it all would cease.
Morning, came with
an azure sky.
The raging storm
had passed us by!
xxx, Cat
Leslie
8 months ago
Thunder storm!
Thanks for readin this, a memory that I won't forget!
Rula
8 months ago
Thunderstorm
can be used as a metaphor for something deeper too, a fight/ quarrel that went well afterwards, (the azure sky)
Anyways this is really awesome!
Thank you for sharing.