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Feb 20, 2023
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Thy Rose
Thy rose
Conceited
Now transformed to egoism
Self absorbed mannerisms
Shape thy rose
They see this rose
And smell thy narcissism
Stench filling the room
Thy rose
Thinks of gold and valuables
Instead of work
Thy rose wilted
Due to thy rose’s pride
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Seren
2 years 4 months ago
Dear Samantha Herr
Welcome to Neopoet, This is an amazing post for a first submission.
The rot in character when one is obsessed by that which isn't truly important. image, status, that's what I got from your write, and it's so true at the end of the day its what's in one's character and heart that's truly important.
I am the Director of Community Outreach if you have anything you need, or questions answered I am happy to help. I truly look forward to reading your poems this is an absolute cracker!
Kind Regards Seren.
Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
dear Samantha,
welcome to Neopoet, it is very nice to meet you.if you need any help, or have questions about the site please ask. any of the advocates will be glad to help you with what they can. this is a very deeply profound poem. an excellent first poem to post!
*hugs, Cat
Alex Tanner
2 years 4 months ago
Hello Samantha
I've read this several times now, beautifully phrased. Alex
Dalton
2 years 4 months ago
Well done poet
The nature of beauty along with countless other essences enforced upon us by society and the media all must be shattered and rebuilt a fabulous first poem thanks for sharing
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 4 months ago
Welcome
Excellent free verse. Great cadence and ample room to breathe.
Well done and welcome,
Tim