Tide

the cosmos
microscopic and colossal
performs a dance of spheres

within it -
the cyclic journey between
Temporal
and Now -

a mobius strip
filled with
countless consorts

I watch, with ease
the Tide
lap my feet

the currents tug
to where the stories go

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

Comments

brittle light

10 years 7 months ago

yes, let it be with ease..no

yes, let it be with ease..no pushing allowed...let it go where it might...why fight the force of destiny, or fate, or the arbitrary.

this is how I read your poem.. .a metaphysics I can relate to.
Even if I got it wrong, I don't care. It made its own sense to me ...and I like it.

sincerely,

judyanne

10 years 6 months ago

thanks so much Al

I am very glad that you could relate to this, and i really appreciate your supportive comments
Love judy
xxx

raj

10 years 7 months ago

Hi Judyanne

Like Al has commented, you have captured the metaphysical elements very cleverly. I would add that you have given it a master stroke with your creative prowess in the concluding two lines ...

Regards,