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Feb 17, 2023
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Time After Time
(for S. James)
eyes the color of wood smoke
laughing softly
chasing the icy fingers
of the dead of winter
from out my heart
while your warm even breath
sends silky shivers along my skin...
I sigh with the realization
that our years together
have been an odyssey spent in
the living knowledge
of each others inner beings
and I would stop time
in it's journey...
to preserve this one moment
through an eternity of night!
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
2 years 4 months ago
Absolutely amazing...
I love this! You have captured the essence of a loving relationship! I wouldn't change a thing! ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
thanks Geez,
I'm glad you liked it, thank you for saying so!
*love & hugs, Cat
Poets Hand
2 years 4 months ago
Dear Cat
This is beautifully said, capturing the intimacy of a relationship over many years of knowing another, a soul mate. I love this eloquent poem. Well versed.
Poets Hand
Hannah
Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
dear Hannah,
thank you so very much for reading and commenting. I appreciate it!
*hugs, Cat
Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
dear Kat,
he is a very special man, I've been married three times in my life time. been married to Steven 42 years, now. and I am deeper in love with him than the day I first fell... he takes really good care of me. and I try to do the same of him. the least I can do is write him poetry...
*major hugs, Cat
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 4 months ago
Hi Cat
Superb job. I think this is a delicate piece. So tender and endearing. Lovely, lovely, lovely poetry.
Tim
Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
thanks Tim
thank you, my dearest Tim! today is my birthday at 1:00 in the afternoon. Steven is pampering me today, lol. I'm glad you liked it.
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 4 months ago
Happy Birthday!!
Get pampered. You deserve it.
Tim
Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
thank you dear Tim,
I had a nap this afternoon and Steven went out to pick up a special dinner with pie!
*hugs and love, Cat
Poets Hand
2 years 4 months ago
Hi Cat
Happy Birthday to you
Happy Birthday to you
Happy Birthday Dear Cat
Happy Birthday to you
Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
dear Hannah,
thanks for the song!
*hugs & love, Cat
Dalton
2 years 4 months ago
Dearest Cat
I wish you an o so special and beautiful birthday your special day and for all who are blessed to know and to be in your life always regards John :)
Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
dearest John,
you always say the loveliest things to me.
*love & hugs, Cat
Leslie
2 years 3 months ago
Time after Time
I read this one. It had such a smooth, flowing feeling about it. The person described must mean
something very special to you. Thanks for replying concerning my laptop I'm glad you received the message.
Have a great day.
thanks for your poetry and kindness.
John
Candlewitch
2 years 3 months ago
dear John,
thank you for seeing my poem for what it is; a gift to my husband, whom I love right down to his toes, lol! he even reads my poetry and sometimes makes suggestions. his favorite poems of mine are by my alter ego, eddy styx. he loves both sides both sides of the coin!