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TIME AND SUN ARE GODS for ALL (A REVISION)

you must know
SUN IS ENERGY GOD
No human can do anything
since ages gone
ages to go

EARTH will have
BIGWIGS
so many have come and gone

now we have AC's
what else to cool off

fruits and trees
juices and produces
we had all overflowing then
had lesser population

now we have samples to see
leeches peaches
later may be perfumes
like essences mostly

still rich will enjoy bubbly' s
CHAMPAGNE
we red or white wine

Lesson learnt
pass time
pray sun comes each day
gives free VIT D to all
KING QUEEN TALL AND SMALL
THANK THE POETS
et al

Hope it's better now
Gee

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 9 months ago

I am not sure...

what your intention was in this write and cannot give a reason other than the context seems garbled and maybe a bit unsure of that intent. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

lovedly

2 years 9 months ago

This poem was just off the cuff

created on some poets despair
why top guys are not controlling GLOBAL WARMING
etc abstract
so it appears mine to you GEE May skip.....