Together For Ever

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Together For Ever" appears to be a romantic piece that explores the theme of enduring love. It uses a variety of imagery and metaphors to convey this theme, such as "Our love inspired dancing the Tango" and "Here we bathe the love of the earth".

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of rhythm and meter. For example, the line "Every day is a promising date" has a different rhythmic pattern than the preceding line, which can disrupt the flow of the poem.

Additionally, the use of language could be more precise. The phrase "our bond is amiable, bluff" is somewhat unclear. The term "bluff" is typically used to describe a pretense or deception, which seems to contradict the positive sentiment of "amiable".

The repetition of the line "Running forward and further" creates a sense of continuity and progression, which aligns well with the theme of enduring love. However, it might be worth considering varying this line slightly with each repetition to add interest and prevent it from becoming monotonous.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from a more structured use of punctuation. For instance, the line "Foremost , our bond is amiable, bluff" has a space before the comma, which is not standard in English punctuation. Correct punctuation can help guide the reader through the poem and enhance its readability.

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I really enjoyed your poem of double acrostic workings. The message is sweet and honorable, worthy of the truest of loves expressions.

much love, your Candle

Hi Rula, this is really good and I like the way your repetition of "Running forward and further" reinforces the themes of love, warmth and affection.
I think the use of the word "stuff." in the second stanza, feels like wasted space Can I suggest, gift or blessing as you move to a spiritual theme in the last stanza? And is this a typo? "Valued and holy_dev."

Well done on meeting the requirements of your acrostic. Ruby xx