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Jan 22, 2011
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That tomorrow
That Tomorrow
That tomorrow
has once again come
But as a today
And
As I did once so say
Every tomorrow will come
Only as a today
Try hard as you wish,
Sweetone,
Tomorrow can never come
As your dish
You may in time's domain
For ever fish
That’s your wish
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
loved
14 years 5 months ago
Oh What of Love
Oh What of Love
Oh what of love
Do you know?
How within the inners
Of ones heart
It does glow
It ignites
Nay burns my whole
That do you know?
What love’s all about
I doubt
But still
I love you more everyday
Morer than yesterday,
If you believe in me today
When I say,
I love you more today
Than I did yesterday
But I can’t that yet say
Whether I’ll love you more
Or lesser than tomorrow
That I just can’t say,
Coz,
Vanni will have
An extremely difficult day
weirdelf
14 years 5 months ago
I love the metaphor of trying
I love the metaphor of trying to control tomorrows by fishing for them.There is wisdom and succinctity in this, loved, perhaps the best of your poems I have read.
One query, is the shirley mentioned the shirley who commented?
Either way I think the poem would work better, more universal, if the name was replaced with "beloved" or something like that.
If you reply to this comment please do so in plain English, not with another poem, I am honestly trying to help and would value your honest reply.
loved
14 years 5 months ago
Grateful thanks
I am an open book
thanks have amended
as advised