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Tomorrow Is Another Day (contest)
I see 'forever' in your eyes
we have come so far, together.
I never thought I could feel this way,
until there was you, coloring my skies.
you never loved before you met me
you thought romance to be sober and polite
in your wildest dreams you never thought
it could be a wild expedition in fantasy
sonorous, I woke you from staid sleep
imagine your surprise, being pursued.
I knocked you off your feet
no woman had ever before made you weep
worlds of discovery in your seeking hands
soul bared under your considering glance
taking us places we had never been
from deserts of glaring sun and shifting sands
you did not have to ask me twice to stay
I saw it in your eyes, those intense burning orbs
I see our future solidified, hand in hand together,
you are all of my tomorrows and tomorrow is another day.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Seren
2 years 4 months ago
Dearest One
I am only going to say
Sigh. ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.
Perfection in words and love, that end line is a cracker.
Love always your Lilbit
Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
dear Lilbit.
he is up but he has not yet read it....he is making breakfast, lol! I'm so glad you liked it. I never tire of writing about "us" or him.
*love, your Cat
RoseBlack
2 years 4 months ago
Just beautiful
The site is so full of love and admiration of each other's significant others! It is absolutely wonderful to see. Your relationship with your Steven is so great! I am so glad you have happiness!
Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
dear Carrie,
thank you! it was a damned miracle we found each other when we did! he is so special!!!
*hugs, Cat
Geezer
2 years 4 months ago
Awwwwwsome...
I just had to say that! ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
lol!
thanks Geez! I have to shout it!!!
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 4 months ago
Lucky dude
Just like me.
Tim
Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
thanks, Tim,
and we are all blessed. it is a good man who knows he has met his match and a smart woman who holds him!
Rula
2 years 4 months ago
dearest Cat
All I can say that you're both blessed. Hope this happiness to last forever.
Thank you for sharing this lovely
Best wishes dear on the contest.
Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
thank you, dear Rula,
i appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem!
*hugs, Cat