Alex Tanner

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Too Late

"She walks in beauty, like the night".
A famous poet penned.
Did he know her in another life for
To love her I am condemned.

How cruel is fate, unjust, unkind
To leave it late for me to find the woman I have sought so long.

The years between a chasm,
Decades too wide.

And though a friendship blossoms
Deep as the deepest sea,
I know, I know, howe’er I yearn
Some things can never be.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Isle of Wight United Kingdom

Favorite Poets: Poe, Swinburn, Bob Dylan, Spike Milligan, Alfred Noyes, Kipling., Many Others.

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Comments

Triskelion

4 months 3 weeks ago

This reads as a timeless quandary of what can be desired is often not acceptable, whether morally or biologically....not sure how that works in the rest of the animal kingdom, but I'm willing to risk that it doesn't matter. Curse? For some, I guess.
The word "for" at the end of L3 is kind of a third thumb. I think it needs a comma before it, moving it to make a new line, or losing it altogether. Just my £2.

Cheers!
Thomas

Alex Tanner

4 months 3 weeks ago

Hello Thomas

Your £2 is welcome as is anybodies. I think you are probably right about the comma, I certainly don't want to lose the "for". I'll edit and see how it reads. Alex,

Leslie

4 months 3 weeks ago

Alex Tanner

I loved this bit of verse and I think that I feel and understand your plight to some extent. I think that we all feel this way to one degree or another when old age creeps in.

Leslie

4 months 3 weeks ago

Alex Tanner

I loved this bit of verse and I think that I feel and understand your plight to some extent. I think that we all feel this way to one degree or another when old age creeps in.

Alex Tanner

4 months 3 weeks ago

Hello Leslie

Thanks for commenting. Fortunately it's not my plight but it is just the sort of work I like to compose. Alex

Ruby Lord

4 months 3 weeks ago

This is great Alex, I love,

This is great Alex, I love, And though a friendship blossoms / Deep as the deepest sea, this holds so much depth, literally and speaks to the idea that even in loss, there is something meaningful gained. Well done, Ruby xx

Alex Tanner

4 months 3 weeks ago

Hi Ruby

Thanks for commenting, you are always so kind. Alex.

Candlewitch

4 months 3 weeks ago

Dear Alex,

Your artistry with words... always so compelling. They work their way into my soul so easily. Like a hot blade through butter... do I have to tell you that I love this poem?

warm hugs, Cat

Alex Tanner

4 months 3 weeks ago

Hello Cat

Dear Cat. Always so kind and fulsome with your praise. It is appreciated, thank you. Alex