TOO LATE (positive critique shop exercise #1) self critique

I'll freely admit abscombs is a typo. It appears a bit too early in the poem to be a hint of protagonist's mind slipping . Form punctuation is a term I came up with on my own when I started writing free verse I began using an even more extreme form of it in which the actual appearance of the poem changed to mimic what was going on. Alas, since the crash I can no longer do that here but gradually changing from one type poetry to another works about as well.

i posted this Then started reading others' shop posts and thought "Boy am I gonna catch it for being too long and using too many devices!" lol............stan Hmmmm...........perhaps I should have said for the POEM being too long lmao

In the 1st paper copy I Did use clear. But while transferring it to here i decided that to break rhyme at that place might be a subtle hint of deterioratiob yet to come......................stan

The only edit was a correction on misspelling absconds which was unintentional, not done as part of poem. I'm pleased you like this experimental form. PS I'm still holding the write we discussed earlier for Ron's shop............stan

I guess I might should have left out "Like" in first line but I just can't help from sacrificing form for clarity of messge lol. So I'll go back and check difference between metaphor and simile and decide whether to edit the poem or the author contents. (still can't get used to thinking of myself as an author ). MORPHING lol. It works best when the change is more gradual but I was already worried that the poem was too long. When really done well the change in form is gradual enough to almost be unnoticed until the reader gets to the end and say to seff"what just happened?" Just an experimental form which I've used a couple of times here................stan

I think you are correct about 1st line. I'm in process of deciding whether to drop the "Like" or edit the author comments. And I guess I should probably change shop name also...before Judy gets her whip out lol.......stan

The protagonist in this poem is suffering from Alsheimer's and the Alshimmers is supposed to display the beginnings of his mental decline as does the "close" misrhyme. The last line is supposed to show him as the disease approaches it's final stage and ideas and words come randomly. I guess I may not have been clear enough in conveying these thingd. But I Do appreciate your coming by............stan

The Protagonist's mind was once crisp and clear lol. I think the third stanza is needed in order to make sense of the title which if expanded would read"I waited too late to put an end to myself in my beloved forests and have now deteriorated beyong the ability to do so". Had to show what his intentions were somewhere.
As an aside .....you sometimes come closer to displaying tourette's than Alzheimers lol. Don't let doctors playing guessing games get you down....................stan

No matter how much I might think this author needs help I just can't bring myself to cuss him out lmao.........stan