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Nov 19, 2019
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Too much Hookah - November Contest (Humor)
Said the night wind to the little lamb
"Do you see what I see?"
The huge friggin' gargoyle
It stands sentry at the opening of the Frigidaire
Well aware of my nocturnal sneaking
You don't?!
What about the lizard in the shower?
It's iridescent blue... purple.. no - PINK!
It listens in on my morning song
And washes my back
Very helpful is he
Scoff you?!
Better watch it - the basilik in the attic will get you
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I don't really take drugs. There is, however, a tiny spider in my shower. I upgraded his identity. :)
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
5 years 7 months ago
I was just...
reading some of your work from quite a while back! Wondering where you had gone, and now here you are! If I can bring people back to the site and get them writing just by thinking about them and reading their work, I am going to be very busy reading the next few days! Glad to see you writing again!
I like the humor here. Don't stay away so long. ~ Gee.
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