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Total Aquareness

Leathered terrace that I cling to
enlists the true, eclectic me
sometimes shavin'
always cravin'
to see the forest through the tree;

I've seen rainbows and spied sunsets
that would make an angel cry
and I notice in the distance
I'll see that same light when I die;

for instance my own Mother
knows how short that I had fell,
sometimes we may see a heaven
from a view that includes hell;

tattered terrace that I long for
with a time that includes you,
so soft your touch
I miss so much
you are my favorite color, blue.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Almost time.......happy v. d.!

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Starlight

Starlight

13 years 5 months ago

hello♥

I really liked this very much. it was very aesthetic and emotional. and the title drew me in.
-Starlight

docmaverick

docmaverick

13 years 5 months ago

What a wonderful....

...way, that you shined "starlight" on my effort. Without your illumination, I'd have gone on believing for EVER....that, no-one had bothered to read it!
Sincerely, thanx;
doc.