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May 30, 2020
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Tox-ecology
Do we love our sunburnt country,
this land and sweeping planes?
Her abundance is exploited,
profit drilled out of her veins.
Of rugged mountain ranges,
of droughts and flooding rains.
A mining tortured landscape,
depleted resource, climate change.
Drought scars her broad horizons,
the Wilderness is burning.
Wildlife suffers death by fire
Ashes, to mother, are returning.
Her jewel blue sea now sick,
dredged & polluted beyond belief.
Sea creatures ingesting plastic,
a bleached & dying coral reef.
The Human footprint is peril,
use & abuse for all its worth.
Depleting gifts of nature,
An enemy, against our Mother Earth.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I’m not an educated writer or poet but I love to rhyme and write so I hope my poem isn’t too basic
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Gracy
5 years 1 month ago
Hi scorpisces, I think your
Hi scorpisces, I think your title is very good. This poem should go for the May contest. Just add (May contest) beside the title, the admins will know what to do.
I like your rhyming and the content is absolutely true. We've destroyed Mother Earth, collectively. Not to mention her oceans...so sad.
My belief is that this pandemic had to arrive, so as to allow M.E. to grow green again.
Are you new here? All the best, Gracy
Geezer
5 years 1 month ago
Welcome to Neo...
I am always glad to see another rhymer come aboard. Another Aussie too! Your poem is so true and well done. A couple of things that might make the rhythm a bit better:
[broad] horizons
[The] wilderness
ingest[ing] plastic
[The] human footprint
Hope to see you posting lots more, ~ Geezer.
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