Tragedy

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The poem "Tragedy" effectively captures the emotional impact of loss and grief. The use of contrasting images, such as a shattered soul or a broken heart, effectively conveys the depth of pain experienced. The poem also explores the different ways in which individuals cope with tragedy, highlighting the complexity of grief.

The use of specific examples, such as a young man lost to war or a girl abducted, adds a sense of realism and relatability to the poem. These examples help to create a connection with the reader and evoke empathy for those who have experienced tragedy.

The poem also touches on the theme of resilience and finding courage in the face of loss. The reference to the lady whose son was nailed to a cross serves as a powerful metaphor for finding strength in the midst of suffering.

One suggestion for improvement would be to further develop the imagery and sensory details in the poem. This could help to enhance the emotional impact and create a more vivid and immersive experience for the reader. Additionally, consider exploring

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I loved it. Descriptive in all the right ways. actually to tell the truth that was the best poem I've ever read on the subject of tragedy great job

to me, that there is always a piece of you missing,
with the loss of someone important in your life.
Gradually, the hole heals and life becomes bearable again,
but the scars are always there, and sometimes, the pain comes sudden!
Like an old physical injury; occasionally, for no apparent reason, the formerly injured part
suddenly screams "I remember!" Yeah, you got it in one.
Your title is okay, the language, clean and clear.

Your rhythm and pace are off a couple of times, but not badly.
I would suggest that you read through and you will discover
a place or two where you can improve upon the rhythm.

Something to think about:
A young man lost, in the ravage of war - [keep as close to the 10 beat meter as possible.]
A girl [taken] on her way to the store.

The simple drop of a short word or syllable, can make or break a line.
"Some will sit [quiet], not saying a word."

As always, my comments and advice are for you to, use it, twist it, ditch it.
~ Geezer.
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Rhyming couplets seem so simplistic, I've avoided them, but you have described a difficult subject with simple language pretty well. Well done for your effort.

a masterpiece of sorrow. My favorite lines are:

The pain is real and it won’t subside,
You wear a mask but it’s hard to hide…
Friends will ask how you are doing,
You say you’re fine but a storm is brewing…

Fathers and mothers, sisters and brothers,
Each grieving differently than the others…
Some will sit quietly not saying a word,
Or scream in anger at what has occurred…

I do not have the words to tell you just how fantastic this poem is...

*hugs, Cat