Tragic circumstance

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem, "Tragic Circumstance," uses a narrative style to depict a journey from darkness to light, which is a common metaphor in poetry. The use of simple language and short lines gives the poem a direct and straightforward tone.

However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of imagery and metaphor. The first three lines set up a metaphorical journey from night to dawn, but this metaphor is not fully developed or connected to the rest of the poem. Developing this metaphor more fully could help to deepen the poem's themes and make the narrative more engaging.

The poem also seems to shift in tone and subject matter in the last four lines, moving from a metaphorical journey to a more literal and humorous depiction of a fall. This shift is somewhat jarring and could be smoothed out to make the poem more cohesive.

The line "Nothing here is clean, nothing has a purpose" suggests a sense of disillusionment or despair, but this theme is not fully developed or connected to the rest of the poem. Expanding on this theme could add depth and complexity to the poem.

Overall, this poem has potential, but could benefit from a more consistent use of metaphor and theme, as well as a smoother transition between different tones and subject matters.

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If it is... Give me the signal. ~ Geez.
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This piece is such a cunningly attractive blurb...I want more!!! please do continue...

*hugs, Cat

that your friend has come to such a deplorable situation. A very nice blurb, to let him know that you care. My apologies for the flip comment. ~ Geez.
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