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Dec 28, 2011
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Transcending Space
Transient thoughts
Seek higher plains
Where reality cannot abide
And bids me follow
Perhaps it leads
To a realm spun from dreams
There is no pain
There are no needs
Asleep in the arms of time
And time does stand still
Transcending space to find
What had been forgotten
Or lost
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Candlewitch
13 years 6 months ago
Dear Chrys,
Great title! It fits the piece well. Your language usage is excellent, as usual. And composition fine. Each line flowed nicely and logically into the next. Your subject matter entrances me. I liked these lines best:
a realm spun from dreams
There is no pain
There are no needs
Asleep in the arms of time
And time does stand still
Transcending space to find
What had been forgotten
Or lost
a bet pensive. I like!
always, Cat
China Blue
13 years 6 months ago
Cat
Thank you so much. Guess people either don't care or don't realize I am back
scribbler
13 years 6 months ago
hello
When near asleep and daydreaming
thoughts grow random nearly streamimg
into realms which might have been
and that elusive time called when
..........but I like yours better............stan
China Blue
13 years 6 months ago
Stan
Thanks yours is good as well but it is not my voice but yours
however the same thought was expressed. Isn't that the best part of writing
Chrys
Candlewitch
13 years 6 months ago
Dear Chrys,
I think it is that people don't know you are back. You'll have to let them know.
I missed your voice here.
btw: I've sent you something!
Love, Cat
China Blue
13 years 6 months ago
Cat
Think I'll let them find out on their own and choose whether they want to follow my work or not.