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May 02, 2023
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Treasure
You gave me the first
blossom from the tree
wrapped with the
smile on your face.
I wore it in my hair
until it wilted,
but saved your smile,
like a jewel
folded in a white napkin,
tucked safely inside
my most guarded heart.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
2 years 2 months ago
Dearest Lavender
This is so tender . Beauty, love appreciation for the partner shines out. Such love is a real "treasure" or this is how at least I see it.
Keep your heart filled with all these raw sweet feelings.
Much enjoyed
Lavender
2 years 2 months ago
Hello, Rula!
So nice to see you! Through time, I have been given many precious treasures - from lovers to grandchildren. It's the light in their faces that warms the heart and makes the memories.
Thank you, Rula!
Lx
Candlewitch
2 years 2 months ago
dear Lavender,
your phrasing shines... the real treasure here is you! love the simplicity of your thoughts and feelings. you are a sweetheart!
*hugs, Cat
Lavender
2 years 2 months ago
Hello, Cat,
Thank you for reading and commenting on this one! Simple appreciations carry us along, don't they?
Hope you are well!
Lx
Jackweb
2 years 2 months ago
Wow!
Sweet verses that gladdens the heart. You've indeed penned a very lovely piece that scents like jasmine. Over all, I really liked the brevity.
Excellent!
.
Lavender
2 years 2 months ago
Hello, Jackweb!
I'm always grateful for your enthusiasm and support - always!
L