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Tribute To The Warriors
The guards that attended to us
Stood in combat to defend us
In death’s dark desert wild
Where delight abate
I’ve missed them like a music.
Through dust of conflict and battle flame
Their knightly virtue proved
Their memories hallowed in the land they loved
Where death is sitting
All skill, knowledge and powers
And the smile upon their cheerful faces
I’ve missed them like a music.
By day and night
To bear the people in their hearts
Your children sang your songs:
In fields so broad
Some duties may fulfil
And I will ask for no reward
Except to serve thee.
From East and West their voices sweetly blended
With the souls you loved.
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Style/Type: Free verse
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neopoet
2 years 1 month ago
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Geezer
2 years 1 month ago
Ahhhh yes...
the soldiers, the army that protected the populace. Are they gone now? Are they mostly controlled by the despots and evil rulers that care nothing for the people? Will you join the military in hopes of returning power to the people? I like the theme and the idea that there is still hope that one can rescue the country from the tyranny of the evil that besets your land. ~ Geezer.
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Mr joghe
2 years 1 month ago
I'm looking forward to the
I'm looking forward to the day when the chirping of the big crickets will stop.
Lavender
2 years 1 month ago
Tribute To The Warriors
"...to bear the people in their hearts." I echo Geezer's sentiments.
Heartfelt poetry.
L