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Mar 19, 2023
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TRIGGER
TRIGGER
Hunting for the trigger
Ever since the well ran dry
Locked in years of silence now
But even so he tries
Yet the trigger still eludes him
And his words they just won’t flow
And though he’s loved her all these years
He sometimes worries that she doesn’t know
That it’s only words that fail him
And though no words come along
He hopes she knows that she has been
His muse in every song
Now around him nature’s turning
And the leaves are turning brown
And the music in his head is like
The shadows that now lengthen on the ground
And now, with Winter coming
The trees will soon be bare
His world has gone full circle
Only he’s left standing there
A solitary figure
On a landscape bleak and grey
Some days he feels he lost a part of
His young self somewhere along the way…
And he cannot shake this feeling that a
Part of him got lost along the way…
© Cyrus Dali Vesuvala
October 2017
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About This Poem
Last Few Words: One had been reading so many horror stories coming out of the US, about lives lost senselessly to guns in the wrong hands ....and fingers that found the trigger far too easily..... that I was reminded of this song that I had written back in 2017 about a very DIFFERENT kind of TRIGGER.... If you clicked on the links below the lyric, I hope you enjoyed watching / listening to the home rcording of this original song (...bum notes et al ....) - Cyrus Dali Vesuvala / Psyve Gurugram 19th March 2023
Style/Type: Structured: Western
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Comments
RoseBlack
2 years 4 months ago
I love this
We can only hope that in the end those we loved the most are aware but I know myself, even though I have made it a practice to say it more often in recent times, there were many years were words escaped me as well. This also resonates as I believe we all have that one in person in our lives that no matter how things turned out, they remained our everything.
Psyve
2 years 4 months ago
Thank you
Thank you RoseBlack, for your perceptive response.
Glad you liked this lyric.
Perhaps you might like the recording too
Cheers
Cyrus