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Trinity River Days

The old miner, who’d been in the back hills
for some time, hailed our small camp.
Best to announce yourself when you’re in gold country.
Firearms, gold, the dark and surprises are a risky mix there.

His friendly manner, great stories and good humor
put us at ease, earning him an offer of a spot for the night
to sleep away the whisky we kept pouring.

With first light the next morning
we discovered the old man was gone,
along with a small amount of our food.
The fare for his company, we supposed.

I remember all of us being comforted
because he hadn’t pilfered the bacon.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: My best friend asked if I wanted to help his brother with some mining in NoCal. Being very young at the time, I said let's do it! Quite an adventure, to be sure!

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Leslie

Leslie

10 months ago

Trinity River Days

A very interesting writing. I can feel the scene, great job. Glad he didn't get the bacon.

Lavender

Lavender

10 months ago

Trinity River Days

Hello, Michael,
Sometimes people we come across in life by chance leave lasting memories and impressions. This felt like a significant moment. I'm wondering if there are more moments to the "Trinity River Days." Feels like an important time period in your life.
Thank you!
L