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Trust
Words, like seeds of kindness sown, bloom into songs that grace our days,
As stories, like rivers flowing free, carry our hearts through life's maze.
We offer up our vulnerable selves, like fragile flowers unfurling,
Grasping for connection's gentle hand, learning love's eternal swirling.
Melodies, like starlight, never linger at the gates of sound,
But race like comets, swift and bright, where harmony's grace is found.
We danced, two whirling dervishes, until laughter, like a fading chime,
Melted into rhythms of the heart, in passionate embrace of time.
The dancing rain, a weeping sky, and thunder's rumbling, ancient call,
Churned through the ocean of our souls, and answered love's own thrall.
Our breath, a whispered symphony, brushed softly on each other's face,
Echoes of a love so deep, a garden blooming in time and space.
Trust, a fragile butterfly, takes flight on wings of whispered sighs,
A secret whispered on the breeze, that forever seeks the skies. It seldom rests, a restless quest, forever yearning to be free,
A homeward haven, sought in vain, across life's vast and boundless sea.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Lavender
4 months 2 weeks ago
Trust
Hello, Mark,
Your poetry of late seems to have taken a more formal structure and depth, and it feels very natural and unforced. This speaks of love, loyalty, and dedication to a lifelong relationship.
"...the ocean of our souls..." How passionate!
Thank you,
L
mark
4 months 2 weeks ago
Yes!
THank you for your feedback ;~)
Mark
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Candlewitch
4 months 2 weeks ago
Dear Mark,
this piece of poetry demands that it be read out loud! I see a growth of passion for life reborn in you. fantastic writing, Mark! I much enjoyed it, read and reread!
love, Cat
Geezer
4 months 2 weeks ago
Glad to see...
the change in your work. It still has the same depth, but smoother. ~ Geez.
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